Friday 3 August 2018

My Treasure

This week we did writing a description on what  our personal treasure is. Here is my description. This was fun to do and I liked doing it. Maybe next time I could make my visual presentation more fun and interesting. I think I did a great job of this writing because I have lots of detail.  
WALT: use conjunctions to join our ideas together 
WALT include descriptive detail.  
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3 comments:

  1. Unknown6 August 2018 at 09:36

    kia ora Ryah i really enjoyed reading your post about you treasure blanket . i also have a treasure blanket that has my name on it. maybe next time you could show a picture of your blanket and describe more what it looks like so the readers can get a picture in there head

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  2. Unknown6 August 2018 at 09:50

    Kia Ora Ryah, I really like your post on your treasure you have descibed it well and now i know where it has come from and where it is now. Maybe next time you could not repeat some of your sentences other than thatit is really good. Noho Ora Mai. From Honor.

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  3. Jazmine10 August 2018 at 10:26

    Kia Ora Ryah.
    I really like your post about your treasure, I like how you have alot of detail in your blog post, Maybe next time you could show a picture of your blanket.
    Bye Jazmine

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