Show not tell Writing

hello 
Yesterday I finished my show not tell writing it did not take that long to do but I liked doing it I got a bit stuck at the start because I did not know what to write down but then I got heaps down so here is my writing we had to do a plan before we started so there is a  photo of that too if you were wondering why some of the writing is high lighted it is because what we did in the plan we had to highlight in the peace of writing that I did 
WALT: Show not tell when we describe